PLEASE HELP MY ESSAY IS DUE TOMORROW!!! help?!
Sipping Cider
As my family left our car and hurried to our incredible autumn destination, I could smell the wonderful aromas of fresh cider, donuts, and roasted almonds. It was a chilly, windy day, but I didn’t care. The amazing scents lured me to the food stands of the Franklin cider mill.
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Answers: It has to be 1 page long and descriptive. Here is mine:
Sipping Cider
As my family left our car and hurried to our incredible autumn destination, I could smell the wonderful aromas of fresh cider, donuts, and roasted almonds. It was a chilly, windy day, but I didn’t care. The amazing scents lured me to the food stands of the Franklin cider mill.
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It sounds good so far, but as you said, it won't pass for a page. Okay, so here is the essay. I added a paragraph. I hope you like it!:
Sipping Cider
As my family left our car and hurried to our incredible autumn destination, I could smell the wonderful aromas of fresh cider, donuts, and roasted almonds. It was a chilly, windy day, but I didn’t care. The amazing scents lured me to the food stands of the Franklin cider mill.
Cider, donuts, caramel apples, hot cocoa, pies- the Franklin cider mill had all of the delicious autumn treats made and ready to eat. My parents bought two gallons of cider, a dozen donuts, and caramel apples for our family. The tangy taste of cider and the sweet taste of cake donuts created a delicious sensation in my mouth as I sat on the oak wooden picnic tables and watched the colored leaves slowly fall on the thick grass.
The scenery was amazing. There were colorful leaves all around. The wooden food stands were surrounded by people seated at oak picnic tables enjoying their delicious food. The people were clad in bright colors- red, orange, and green.
After I enjoyed my cider and donuts, my family and I browsed the assortment of dark orange pumpkins waiting to be carved. My little brother, Adam, picked out the largest pumpkin in the basket to carve into a smiling jack-o-lantern. When we got to our car to leave, I was unhappy that we were leaving but glad that we had such an exciting time at the Franklin cider mill.
The cider mill is a fantastic setting with scrumptious autumn cuisines, colorful leaves and cheerful, hungry people. I can’t wait to go again next fall!
P.S. I like your title. It's cool!
I hope I helped! :) ?
Talk more about your family and the destination. Donuts sound so good right now....;)
Watch out for fatal flaws (you used contractions).
Isn't this a bit too much? Apparently you have no problems writing. Why did you need help?
How about describing the cider making process and the differences between it and plain old apple juice, like the filtering proces and how the press works to expell the juice, look to it being more descriptive for the story is a narrative.