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Please i need comments. Are my poems good? Should i continue writing?
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The sky is but vibrance above our head
It hovers there peacefully over lives
We think were safe until were dead
And then its just a window poised in time

Grass on which we play will be our graves
The bright sounds swagger with the rest
But will overcome the chaos and be saved
The animosity in all will be our calling

No one can ponder that we are alive
When light can no longer reach our eyes
We stumble in darkness alone and hide
Knowing one day we will be gone

1 day ago
Standing on this earth with nothing
Barren souls sweep the sand
Searching for their lost hearts
The grains flow through my hand

We all are born
We all light a fire of hope
But it flickers and dies
As we hang from the ropes

I should live life with respect and poise
Life is a wing until we have fallen.
From my place I make my stand
I take this sand of souls forgotten
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Here is a collection of poems I have written over the past week. They took me all of about 5 minutes each. I just write sometimes to get out what I feel. I'm not out to be a poet, it's just a way I get my feelings out. I am by no means depressed. I am a very happy, optimistic person. But anyone who has experienced life knows it has its dark side. That is where my poetry comes from. Thats all.

kind of a simplistic rhyming scheme, but they're good enough as far as content.

But you're in the wrong category...please reclassify your questions, because here (Beer Wine and Spirits) you're just going to get a bunch of drunks or people interested in drinking...and generally not the type of people who are interested in critiquing poems.